Lance Aichele
Friday, August 12, 2011
What do you think of this? Please read!?
Your paragraph sounds great, so far, I'm interested to know what kind of gift your protagonist has. I have only one suggestion to improve your paragraph. Don't use as many fragments in your beginning sentences. Other than that, keep on writing!
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